Monday, January 31
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The following two paragraphs were written in response to the expository writing prompt about citizenship. Use the paper rubric to grade one of the paragraphs. They are typed exactly as they were turned in.
First task:
- Grade both of the responses using the rubric. You should use a highlighter and be specific in the certain bullets that you highlight. Then, circle a specific point value (1-4) to indicate how you would have scored it. The rubric is two-sided. Be sure to put your name on the rubric and label which side is Example #1 and Example #2. See me if you this doesn't make sense.
Second task:
- Then, re-write one of the paragraphs using the author’s over-riding ideas and supporting details. Try to write it as a 4 paying attention to the criteria on the rubric.
- Type your re-written paragraph on Google Docs. Share it with collopy.collopy@gmail.com.
Third task:
- After you revise and re-write it, make a list at the bottom of the different aspects of the paragraph that you specifically improved.
Here's the topic. Pay special attention to the relevance of the writer's ideas to the given topic.
- Write a letter to your principal (one well-developed paragraph) explaining the fairness/unfairness of rewarding students for excellent citizenship and withholding privileges for those who fail to meet citizenship standards.
Example #1
Dear Mr. Burr,
I think that it is fair to reward students when they have excellent citizenship Because the kids who actually try their Best and are nice caring students. The students that don’t try and don’t care about any of these things should not Be rewarded if they aren’t trying like the other students are. Many of the students that don’t care they always think that they don’t have to do anything to have good citizenship and everyone will be rewarded But that’s not fair to anyone who tries to do their Hardest. I don’t think that the kids give it their all and try their best want to give up and not do anything at school they just do the minimum and it shouldn’t Be that way.
Example #2
Dear Mr. Burr,
Citizenship grade here at this school I think is great especially the student lounge but this grade has it pluses and its delta’s. The fairness in the citizenship grade is it gives privileges and good ones, which make people, want it more like the student lounge. Then there is the unfairness of it. When I was at my old school in d11 we didn’t have these privileges but we did have citizenship grades for each class and how we acted but they were in numbers and they were graded 1-5 and I thought that if Manitou would do that and also I don’t like how the people have to go to a teacher for primetime I thought prime time was supposed to be fun but it’s not and then people talk about the students lounge and you can’t go to it so if you change it to the class grade as I mentioned and if the average is a three then you can have a sticker. The reason I think that should change is because more people would maybe have a chance to be able to go to the student lounge. Thank you for reading this I hope you consider the changes I suggested.
